Welcome to my new feature called Wednesday Wing where I’ll be passing on
observations, tips and information to readers I’ve made a note of.
Today I’m passing on a basic tip about dialogue.
For many of you I’ll be talking to the converted BUT with self-publishing there are many books for sale which DO have areas which need improving.
Years ago when I read a book, the dialogue style never bothered me. NOW IT DOES, because I read a book with a different mind-set. Now I’m reading it for it’s entertainment value for myself and others. Writing is always evolving and is now a very competitive marketplace. Rules many adults learnt in school as children have changed and serious writers need to be aware of how dialogue can affect the flow of their storyline.
Dialogue followed by he/she said or he/she asked or the character’s name said/ asked etc for me labels the book as a “NOVICE or EARLY STAGE” piece of writing. A book may be the result of many drafts but if it still contains these basic words in excess, then I feel the book would benefit from more work before publication.
Along with the words mentioned above I’m likely to see several others which will rob me of a great read. Rayne Hall has a much larger comprehensive list of “Novice Beginner words” which she talks about in her books The Word Loss Diet and Why does My book Not sell
If your book has he/she turned to look at…
He / she nodded slowly
SIGH, whisper, really or nice
Then you are letting down the reader and letting yourself down. There is a whole wealth of wonderful words and ways of expressing them to make your writing come alive for all the senses of the reader.
So what can you be using instead? Here is an easy example.
“I’ll have a pound of carrots,” said Mary, jabbing her finger at the pile on display.
This could easily be; “I’ll have a pound of carrots.” Mary jabbed her finger at the mountain of orange vegetables.
Which one do you prefer and why?
Have a go yourself, try improving on the example above or open a book, choose a sentence and re-write it to improve it.
Here are links to all the previous Wednesday Wing Posts
May 6th 2015 – Checking your WordPress is linked to your Twitter helps others share your posts http://wp.me/p2Eu3u-7L2
May 13th 2015 – Writer’s Craft books by Rayne Hall full of REALLY useful tips http://wp.me/p2Eu3u-7Ma
May 20th 2015 – Hyperlinks, Short links and Linkys http://wp.me/p2Eu3u-7Rl
May 27th 2015 – Making your post titles easy to share on Twitter to maximise views. http://wp.me/p2Eu3u-7SA
June 17th 2015 – Creating Twitter pics that fit http://wp.me/p2Eu3u-7Y4
June 24th 2015 – Creating a slideshow on WordPress http://wp.me/p2Eu3u-7Yo
July 1st 2015 – Getting the most out of Google+ posts http://wp.me/p2Eu3u-7YM
July 8th 2015 – Automated Tweets, LOVE ‘EM or HATE ‘EM? make use of them http://wp.me/p2Eu3u-7Za
July 15th 2015 – What’s Your Book Genre? http://wp.me/p2Eu3u-84S
July 22nd 2015 – Should you write dreams into your work? http://wp.me/p2Eu3u-84Q
July 29th 2015 – What can I read in the first 10% of your book? http://wp.me/p2Eu3u-84W